I have this assignment: to write an article for my imaginary veterinary clinic's newsletter, on zoonoses (diseases that can be spread to humans from animals).

It's basically taking the previous two years of my in-depth scientific study and then re-translating all that in simple terms. I'm finding it hard to work out whether I'm still speaking gibberish or whether a normal person can understand me.

So I would be grateful if someone could read over the article to help me with that. Just let me know (you can PM me) and I'll PM it to you when I'm ready for it to be proofread. It's due on Friday night so after editing by my friends I should have it out tomorrow.

It's an interesting assignment - I think I have taken for granted that I can use big long words to perfectly describe something, forgetting that it's a completely different language for most people!

I am not the best but I can probably help find mistakes for sure.

Sounds good to me!

If you need simple, I'm your woman LOL!

I don't understand big words :sad: so would be happy to take a look for you

Simple is me hahahahaha

Oh wow, thanks you guys, really appreciated.

 

And I did not mean 'simple' in that way LOL!

Double posting - hope it's okay as I need this done by Friday afternoon.

 

Because I'm lazy (and also very sleepy) here it is as a link.

 

http://www.freewebs.com/chrysocome/zoonoses.htm

 

Post here or PM anything that doesn't make sense or is difficult to understand.

 

Thanks so much everyone.

 

I think I'll be doing one for pet and wild birds for this site .

 

EDIT: Forgot to mention that this is targeted at dairy farmers. Mastitis = inflammation of the teat causing rotten milk. Splash guard = used to redirect urine away from where workers are milking.

Edited July 24, 200816 yr by Chrysocome

That is brilliant!!! It was SOOOOO easy to read too! I couldn't fault it and i understood it all

 

P.s - That is not double posting, you just replied to your own topic which is perfectly fine

Edited July 24, 200816 yr by **Liv**

hey for some reason the link went wonky for me got lost of *%&^%% in the middle of things and a bit of wingdings so I gave up on grammar and spelling and just tried to read the article.

 

It was good, a little dry as I could care less about the subject matter but I am sure that dairy farmers would read it and like it.

 

Hope that helps

Crikey! I grew up spending many weekends on a dairy farm, walking around barefoot in cow poop, getting peed on by cows in the dairy whilst putting the milkers on them, with none of those measures except the washing hands before eating part, and we used to wash out the milk vats with iodine and a big scrubbing brush, and there was a big pressure hose to clean out the poo from the dairy which would go down to a big sewerage sludge in the back paddock where the flies bred in it. You just had to watch out when a cow lifted her tail! Hmm, I don't know how we all manage to survive these diseases.

Farmers are pretty tough smart people for the most part, but sometimes don't speak the high tech language, they tend to observe the animals for symptoms though because it is their livelihood and if an animal gets sick it can spread through the herd with devastating consequences and, if they get sick, well who is going to look after the animals? I liked the article, it is a good reference.

Comes across as simple and easy to read; it covers the basics and main points without it being an essay to read. Ive worked with catching feral pigs and also animals for meat so has a bit of relevance to alot of those diseases we had to look out for.

Chryso empty your PM box

Very good. -

I could understand it! Which we all know by now that it's hard to explains things to me LOL!!!!

I love the table in there too

If you don't get an A+ i'd be suprised

Edited July 25, 200816 yr by Neat

it looks great and it is easy to read and understand

Edited July 25, 200816 yr by birdluv

Thank you everyone for your help, I did get it in on time so now I have to start worrying about the next assignment

 

Special thanks to Melbournebudgies who helped me so much.

 

I had an exhausting week... I spent 8am-5pm doing 7 hours of lectures then stayed up to 1am most nights doing this assignment (kind of sad, since it was given to us in April). I accidentally slept in today... and woke up at 3:30... :shock:

 

DrNat... that is still very common today! Lol. The presence of the infectious agents and random chance play a part too.

 

This is what it ended up looking like (not the final cut for the actual writing though)

How many pop culture references can you find in our first page? Lol.

The other articles in the paper are about antibiotic resistance in bacteria. If anyone would like to read it I can post a link to it somewhere.

 

Thanks again to everyone!

Edited July 26, 200816 yr by Chrysocome

looks awesome